DRAFT: This module has unpublished changes.
DRAFT: This module has unpublished changes.
Sorry it's late. My internet went down in my dorm and I forgot about posting when I got to work.
DRAFT: This module has unpublished changes.
DRAFT: This module has unpublished changes.
2. Heather Preston
I felt the argument presented was interesting and presented in an engaging manner. It was very creative, however, I felt the views presented were very one-sided. It would have been more informative and effective if one character had presented a counter-argument. There was a definite overtone of anger throughout the narrative and I’m unsure of whether or not that was intentional, but it felt unsettled. I’m not sure which dialogue you were intending for the final script, but the conversation with Mulan I felt presented a more well-rounded selection of topical interests. I enjoyed your exploration of Mulan competing with a man and it being okay as long as she was a he. I would have liked to see more of this dialogue. My sister constantly competed with boys throughout highschool in sports, but the problem she ran into, rather than it frustrating them that she was a “girl”, was that they thought it was hot and they liked a girl competing with them and beating them. She simply enjoyed the competition (none of the girls her age were of any athletic competition to her) and was not looking to be objectified (in fact, it frustrated her), but the girls her age saw her as showing off and wouldn’t associate. This system of association and assumptions made it difficult for her to make friends. An exploration into the complexities of this issue may enhance and focus the direction of your dialogue, but I liked your creative approach.
09/28/10, 10:28 pm
1. Danielle Malambri
The future is not ours to see...
09/27/10, 01:34 pm