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My Portfolio - Home
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01/21/09 10:43 pm |
Valerie Molina |
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Welcome
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10/01/21 9:13 pm |
Valerie Molina |
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Establishing Concerns
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01/26/09 10:28 pm |
Valerie Molina |
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Home Sweet Home
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10/01/21 9:33 pm |
Valerie Molina |
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Tentative Position on Privacy Issues
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09/26/21 4:16 am |
Valerie Molina |
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Research on Celebrities and Privacy Issues
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09/28/21 9:33 pm |
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Open Letter to a Friend (WA #1)
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09/26/21 6:13 pm |
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01/29/09 6:17 pm |
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2. 01/29/09, 06:17 pm
Says: "Bryan Chabrow
January 29. 2009
Peer Review of Valerie Molina
Your letter has a very strong argument. You are telling your friend that you feel that you do not want to be her roommate next year because you feel that you two have grown into different people and that you would feel happier and more comfortable with other living arrangements. I believe that this is an issue of evaluation because it is about whether something is good or bad and desirable or undesirable. This argument is definitely part of a long term discussion because it’s obvious that you have had conversations about your living arrangements for next year with your tentative roommates. Seeing as this is a very personal argument though, I do not know a great deal about what positions people have taken in the past or about the ongoing controversy concerning it.
The argument is directed specifically at Melinda and the letter was written directly to her. The argument intends to tell Melinda several things but the main purpose of it is to inform her that you do not want to live with her next year and that you’ve “finally realized that maybe [you] aren’t the same people.” What you are intending to do is take action and tell her that you want to do something different next year. But you do a good job of trying to be very considerate and you often talk about how this decision has been “on [your] mind for a long time”.
You use and integrate ethos, pathos, and logos in this letter. You use logos by backing up your argument with evidence, reasons, and logic. Your logic and reasoning behind your claim is that you would be happier and more comfortable living with other people. You use pathos by adding an element of emotion to your letter. You tell Melinda several times that you are sorry for writing to her and being so blunt and that this is very difficult for you. Ethos is implied and still present in your letter because it seems as if Melinda knows you very well and that she trusts your character and finds you very credible. Also, the professional tone and language of this letter also adds an element of ethos to it.
You organized everything in this letter very well. You have a claim, evidence, backing, qualifiers, and you talk about differing views. All of these things are vocalized very well and you put them together in a logical fashion that flows well. You provide a bit of background about the issue and then go into the claim. After that you back up your argument and offer evidence is support of it. It all makes sense and your letter is easy to read through. Concerning strategies to negotiate differences, I like how you tell Melinda that you still “want to hang out”. It really shows her that although you do not want to live with her, you still care about her and want to be her friend
Overall, your argument is very effective. It is an incredibly personal argument and it is evident that a lot of thought went into formulating it. You clarify the differences between you and Melinda and in a straightforward manner you tell her that you do not want to live with her. I can tell that you are trying to convince her to see things from your point of view and to not be upset. As a whole, your claim and letter in general is well thought out and I feel that it is very effective in conveying your message.
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1. 01/29/09, 06:16 pm
Says: "Bryan Chabrow
January 29. 2009
Peer Review of Valerie Molina
Your letter has a very strong argument. You are telling your friend that you feel that you do not want to be her roommate next year because you feel that you two have grown into different people and that you would feel happier and more comfortable with other living arrangements. I believe that this is an issue of evaluation because it is about whether something is good or bad and desirable or undesirable. This argument is definitely part of a long term discussion because it’s obvious that you have had conversations about your living arrangements for next year with your tentative roommates. Seeing as this is a very personal argument though, I do not know a great deal about what positions people have taken in the past or about the ongoing controversy concerning it.
The argument is directed specifically at Melinda and the letter was written directly to her. The argument intends to tell Melinda several things but the main purpose of it is to inform her that you do not want to live with her next year and that you’ve “finally realized that maybe [you] aren’t the same people.” What you are intending to do is take action and tell her that you want to do something different next year. But you do a good job of trying to be very considerate and you often talk about how this decision has been “on [your] mind for a long time”.
You use and integrate ethos, pathos, and logos in this letter. You use logos by backing up your argument with evidence, reasons, and logic. Your logic and reasoning behind your claim is that you would be happier and more comfortable living with other people. You use pathos by adding an element of emotion to your letter. You tell Melinda several times that you are sorry for writing to her and being so blunt and that this is very difficult for you. Ethos is implied and still present in your letter because it seems as if Melinda knows you very well and that she trusts your character and finds you very credible. Also, the professional tone and language of this letter also adds an element of ethos to it.
You organized everything in this letter very well. You have a claim, evidence, backing, qualifiers, and you talk about differing views. All of these things are vocalized very well and you put them together in a logical fashion that flows well. You provide a bit of background about the issue and then go into the claim. After that you back up your argument and offer evidence is support of it. It all makes sense and your letter is easy to read through. Concerning strategies to negotiate differences, I like how you tell Melinda that you still “want to hang out”. It really shows her that although you do not want to live with her, you still care about her and want to be her friend
Overall, your argument is very effective. It is an incredibly personal argument and it is evident that a lot of thought went into formulating it. You clarify the differences between you and Melinda and in a straightforward manner you tell her that you do not want to live with her. I can tell that you are trying to convince her to see things from your point of view and to not be upset. As a whole, your claim and letter in general is well thought out and I feel that it is very effective in conveying your message.
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Summary of "Farmer in Chief"
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10/01/21 8:20 pm |
Valerie Molina |
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Exploratory Writing about "Farmer in Chief"
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09/30/21 4:05 pm |
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My Tentative Position on Food
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01/29/09 3:28 am |
Valerie Molina |
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My Column on Food (WA #2)
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10/01/21 10:21 pm |
Valerie Molina |
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Publications I Love & Hate
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09/29/21 9:32 pm |
Valerie Molina |
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My Favorite Open Letter's
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09/28/21 9:41 pm |
Valerie Molina |
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06/07/14 1:26 am |
Letter in Response to a Peer's Column (W #3)
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02/12/09 4:36 am |
Valerie Molina |
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02/11/09 10:58 pm |
Summary/Exploratory Writing of Shitty First Drafts
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10/01/21 8:23 pm |
Valerie Molina |
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My Working Draft- An Open Letter to a Friend
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09/27/21 3:34 am |
Valerie Molina |
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02/24/09 3:44 am |
Peer Review of Lisa Rizzo's Letter
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02/22/09 11:44 pm |
Valerie Molina |
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Response to Peer Reviews of my Letter
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09/30/21 2:44 pm |
Valerie Molina |
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My Final Draft W#4
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02/26/09 5:31 am |
Valerie Molina |
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Translating Evidence
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01/21/09 10:43 pm |
Valerie Molina |
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Summary of Civic Participation
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10/01/21 6:31 pm |
Valerie Molina |
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Summary/Exploratory Writing- Reintroduction of Wolves
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09/27/21 3:30 am |
Valerie Molina |
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Rhetorical Moves Exercise -Wolf Reintroduction Article
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03/02/09 7:29 pm |
Valerie Molina |
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Rhetorical Situation Analysis- Lucky Charm Article
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09/30/21 4:57 am |
Valerie Molina |
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Summary/Exploratory Writing- Lessons from the Wolf
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09/27/21 4:20 am |
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Rhetorical Analysis-Lessons from the Wolf
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03/05/09 4:14 am |
Valerie Molina |
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Response to "This is Not a Bob Dylan Movie" By Robert Sullivan
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10/01/21 1:33 pm |
Valerie Molina |
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WA #5
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09/30/21 3:59 am |
Valerie Molina |
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Review of Caroline Denton's Paper
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09/27/21 1:34 am |
Valerie Molina |
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Proposal Analysis
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03/31/09 3:57 pm |
Valerie Molina |
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WA #5 FINAL
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04/14/09 2:43 am |
Valerie Molina |
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Proposal Draft #1
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09/30/21 4:27 am |
Valerie Molina |
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Gaining Credibility
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10/01/21 12:03 pm |
Valerie Molina |
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Proposal to the Emerson Channel
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09/27/21 6:41 pm |
Valerie Molina |
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Campaigning for the Future
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01/21/09 10:43 pm |
Valerie Molina |
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Public Advocacy Campaign
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10/01/21 8:51 pm |
Valerie Molina |
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PAC Meeting Log
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01/21/09 10:43 pm |
Valerie Molina |
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